Certainly Love

So...another great chapter! I was drawn in very quickly to this piece. Who doesn't like a story with an arranged marriage and finally meeting the fiancee at the altar. Again, ...

So...Way to go! It was indeed very intriguing. At first I thought..."Oh no, another boring run through." ---But you have proven me wrong! As I continued reading, you brought forth ...

This was a good read! I was able to understand it and it was most certainly a breath of fresh air to see it flow so well! I didn't see ...

Hello! In all honesty, I know you're a teenager lacking experience and the only world you know right now is probably high school life. (I mean no offense.) So I ...

A lot of your imagery was full of color and shapes just like a description of a painting. I am not much of a poet, so I don't have much ...

Hello, So I read through and found I was getting bored by the massive blocks of narration. I understand you are trying to show the reader what is going on ...

Seems like a really good illustration. I do like the representation of the Red Duct Tape. Pretty interesting. I think you have a good flow when it comes to narration, ...

I was only able to read two chapters, but so far I like it! I love the era. I have always wanted to write a story in this setting. I ...

"The light from the sun made every single colour look nicer. The grass was greener, the roses more red, and everything just seemed nicer and warmer." These sentences are redundant. ...

"For another moment, the mountains were peaceful. Then as if on cue, a lone horseman appeared in the horizon, staying still in the darkness yet untouched by the rising sun, ...

"Surely, you jest." "No, madam. If I did, you would be in stitches with laughter." A giggle squeezed past her barely parted lips, and after receiving a nod of appreciation ...

Very good start to a new novel. It was very well written and it seems you and I have a similar writing style. Yours would probably be much more above ...

Interesting. I am not really great at analyzing poems, but I did get the sense of dancing and being red sore from it. Haha Hope that was the message, if ...

maybe you should write a story with some makes a story interesting when you create characters and mold them into who you want them to be. Be the God in ...

It's rather good, but please stay in the same tense. I was thinking this story was in the 18th century and that the setting was in London, but when I ...